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Perfect Imperfections by *Miseria-Cantare:iconMiseria-Cantare:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


If my lips were chapped
Would you still kiss them?
If my last words were slurred
Would you still miss them?
If my hair was matted
Would you still say it shined?
If I was really moody towards you
Would you still be kind?
If I tripped down the stairs
Would you still help me to me feet?
If I was an hour later to dinner
Would you still wait for me to eat?
If I lost a huge game
Would you still cheer me on?
If I was afraid of the dark
Would you hold me ‘til dawn?
If I couldn’t stop crying
Would you still kiss my tears away?
If I died tomorrow
Could you still live another day?
I guess what I want to know
Is how it would be
If I weren’t perfect like you thought
Would you still always love me…?
©2004-2009 *Miseria-Cantare
:iconmiseria-cantare:

Author's Comments

its about love and all that shit
i have no idea where this came from
its like when yur at a funeral and u all of a sudeen think of a knock-knock joke.....

EDIT: I've been cleaning out my deviations and I really wanted to delete this, but so many people seemed to like it. I'm so conflicted. Quite honestly, I hate the poem.

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:iconexpungemalice:
~expungemalice Feb 17, 2004, 7:15:49 PM
MINE. i steal. :+fave: you say everything i wish i could to two very important people in my life. argh. i long for articulation like yours. great job.

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did you ever wonder?
i did.
:iconbluesypher:
~bluesypher Feb 17, 2004, 10:58:08 PM
Beautiful poem!! I love the structure and the beat! I would answer yes to all of those questions! Your poems keep getting better and better, you have a real gift!:D Keep it up:D

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"Kid, I wouldn't last five minutes leading an outfit like this if I wasn't rotten as hell."

Ben Wade
:iconbluesypher:
~bluesypher Feb 17, 2004, 10:58:27 PM
:+fav: I forgot:D

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"Kid, I wouldn't last five minutes leading an outfit like this if I wasn't rotten as hell."

Ben Wade
:icontharah:
~tharah Feb 18, 2004, 2:18:45 AM
I love this for so many reasons. But mainly you perfectly sum up all those little doubts, worries, and questions I've asked in the back of my mind for my relationship.

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"Yarg!"

Yes...fear the yarg....you know you want to!
:iconafraidofyou:
~afraidofyou Feb 18, 2004, 5:54:04 AM
You know that it is a great poem where I refrain from sarcastic comments with every question. It was so heartfelt and (hopefully no offense) insecure that I would have to love it even if it weren't so beautiful. I think I will be :!fav:ing this.

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~livingpoetsociety loves this ~straight-edge, ~Minnesotan self-promoting bastard of a ~ Lyricists!
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~rawkabella Feb 18, 2004, 9:01:16 AM
hmm i wonder if i died...who would care? what would they do? i wonder all those who love me, what will their reaction be....especially when a big fight occured b4 i passed....?or i'll become un-noticed? i'm acting werid now...
bye
nice poem. quite thought provoking

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come back and haunt me...
[link]
:icontourniquetshadow:
~tourniquetshadow Feb 18, 2004, 1:15:12 PM
So hold on, the narrator IS perfect right? :O_o:

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:meditate: Mister Einstein says, put your hand on a hot stove for a minute, and it seems like an hour. Sit with a pretty girl for an hour, and it seems like a minute. THAT`s relativity. :ninjaeat:
:iconsilverfenris:
~SilverFenris Feb 18, 2004, 3:06:40 PM
no wonder it has 5 favs! This is GOOD! I really like it! And the rhyme scheam is subtle, at first I didn't even realize it! This is really great! I can say no more besides it is wonderful! Structured, but that only adds to the meaning instead of take from. Way to go! :heart:

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"I'll kill you so hard your head will spin" Lisa~
If we shadows have offended,
Think but this, and all is mended,
That you have but slumber'd here,
While these visions did appear.
And this weak and idle theme,
No more yielding but a dream...
:iconyourkissmightkillme:
~YourKissMightKillMe Feb 18, 2004, 4:26:19 PM
wow thats a really good poem i liked it a lot! i wish i could write like that
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